There are much better ways than doing that. Remember ...

Posted by Goodsport from adsl-216-102-199-185.dsl.snfc21.pacbell.net on October 17, 1999 at 02:53:53:

In Reply to: Re: Personally, Goodsport, you did a damn good job. BTW, if you guys don't like it, then why don't you write a new ending?(NM) posted by Short Round on October 16, 1999 at 19:33:39:

: Ok, then I will.

... five years has passed between the Tessa story and the DWO story - a lot could have happened in five years. There are so many other creative (and quite frankly, better and more mature) ways to handle all this than rewriting any of the Tessa story. Examples include:

- The fact that Shorty, Brett and James are brothers: perhaps before he exploded in the volcano, Sauron appeared to James as Gandalf and told him that the story of the maternity-ward switching (Sauron most certainly would stoop to that level if he needed to). In reality, you three really are brothers - perhaps Brett's blood didn't work because what was needed was the blood of the Lambert brothers born in 1985 or something (perhaps there was Lunar Eclipse or something that year - I don't know... just a thought). If you have a better idea, by all means use it, but use it in your DWO story, not by rewriting anything in the Tessa story.

- At the end of the Tessa story, Indiana Jerico (who's really Faramir) and Aragorn stayed in the world that Valinor was in, although they sailed back to their homeland of Gondor (across the ocean from Valinor). Perhaps sometime during those five years those two may have decided to come back to our world (with Gandalf's help), sensing that a resurrected Sauron (how he came back to life would be up to you) somehow escaped Mount Doom (which must have transported back to Mordor after temporarily being in Valinor) and travelled to our world. Not nearly as powerful as he once was (because Tessa had destroyed the One Ring of Power that he needed in Chapter 62 to become fully invincible), he needed Micah's old cloning machine (from Chapter 13) to give himself a human body to walk around in until he could regain his full power.

- Explanation for how the DWO got all those MiG's: simple... Nobody's corporation (the front-cover for the DWO... corporations usually carry after losing its original chairman - it happens all the time) perhaps bought a lot of them from the Russian government, who was probably selling them off to offset its crumbling economy (very simple explanation, but it really should be explained in the DWO story nevertheless).

- Explanation for how the Phoenix Group got all of its airpower: the U.S. government saw the danger of the DWO and what happened with the rupture to Valinor's world, and decided to change the Phoenix Group from an espionage organization to a division of the military (which it wasn't in the Tessa story). Again, a really simple explanation, but really should be explained in the DWO story.

- Explanation for Micki Jones not being in the DWO story: remember the ending of James Bond film "On Her Majesty's Secret Service"? Perhaps Micki suffered the same fate at the hands of a DWO agent, which caused Shorty to join the Phoenix Group, since they were the only ones with the resources to help him get revenge on the DWO. There's great potential for further plot and character development there. :)

- Explanation for Indy and Meg not acting like they're married in the DWO story: perhaps they still are but didn't get sick of each other (rare in married couples these days, unfortunately), or perhaps they got divorced (how they remained friends, though, I have no idea), or whatever.

Remember, these are all points that very well could have happened in the five years between the two stories. Some of them may have been assumed in the DWO story, but they really should be written in (perhaps in flashbacks... it's up to you) as to clear up a lot, and that ultimately would make everything flow smoothly from one story to the next.

As for Chapter 64 in the Tessa story, who's to say that Tessa dreamed the entire Tessa story? Perhaps everything in the Tessa story actually happened, and Chapter 64 took place many years after both the Tessa story and the DWO story... and an elderly Tessa was remembering everything that happened as she was on a plane, and then started telling the guy sitting next to her about it. Very much like in the "Young Indiana Jones Chronicles" where old Indiana Jones remembered his youth and started telling it to the first person who'd listen. :D

My point is that it's much better to leave the Tessa story alone and to think of creative ways to make the two (as they already are) flow together while writing the DWO story (using my suggestions would ensure that you wouldn't even have to rewrite any of what you've already written in your DWO story). Especially with the Lambert brothers thing... writing the explanation into the DWO story would add so much more possibilites for plot or sub-plot rather in future chapters rather than touching the Tessa story, and ultimately both stories would even richer for it!

-G

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THAT'S A WHOOP ASS ENDING! Short Round 07:37:49 10/17/99 (1)
- Re: THAT'S A WHOOP ASS ENDING! Goodsport 11:14:43 10/17/99 (0)
You know, those points sound pretty good... Brett (Maverick) Lambert 06:16:37 10/17/99 (5)
- Thanks. However... Goodsport 18:32:46 10/17/99 (4)
  - I know, but I just felt like writing something!! I am currently writing to other things!(It's getting addictive!)(NM) Short Round 12:30:42 10/19/99 (0)
  - Re: Thanks. However... Brett (Maverick) Lambert 19:31:19 10/17/99 (0)
  - Let's stop the bickering... Goodsport 19:13:47 10/17/99 (1)
    - Agreed! (nm) Brett (Maverick) Lambert 19:42:07 10/17/99 (0)
Oops, the last sentence should read... Goodsport 02:59:24 10/17/99 (0)

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: : Ok, then I will.

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: ... five years has passed between the Tessa story and the DWO story - a lot could have happened in five years. There are so many other creative (and quite frankly, better and more mature) ways to handle all this than rewriting any of the Tessa story. Examples include:

: - The fact that Shorty, Brett and James are brothers: perhaps before he exploded in the volcano, Sauron appeared to James as Gandalf and told him that the story of the maternity-ward switching (Sauron most certainly would stoop to that level if he needed to). In reality, you three really are brothers - perhaps Brett's blood didn't work because what was needed was the blood of the Lambert brothers born in 1985 or something (perhaps there was Lunar Eclipse or something that year - I don't know... just a thought). If you have a better idea, by all means use it, but use it in your DWO story, not by rewriting anything in the Tessa story.

: - At the end of the Tessa story, Indiana Jerico (who's really Faramir) and Aragorn stayed in the world that Valinor was in, although they sailed back to their homeland of Gondor (across the ocean from Valinor).  Perhaps sometime during those five years those two may have decided to come back to our world (with Gandalf's help), sensing that a resurrected Sauron (how he came back to life would be up to you) somehow escaped Mount Doom (which must have transported back to Mordor after temporarily being in Valinor) and travelled to our world.  Not nearly as powerful as he once was (because Tessa had destroyed the One Ring of Power that he needed in Chapter 62 to become fully invincible), he needed Micah's old cloning machine (from Chapter 13) to give himself a human body to walk around in until he could regain his full power.

: - Explanation for how the DWO got all those MiG's: simple... Nobody's corporation (the front-cover for the DWO... corporations usually carry after losing its original chairman - it happens all the time) perhaps bought a lot of them from the Russian government, who was probably selling them off to offset its crumbling economy (very simple explanation, but it really should be explained in the DWO story nevertheless).

: - Explanation for how the Phoenix Group got all of its airpower: the U.S. government saw the danger of the DWO and what happened with the rupture to Valinor's world, and decided to change the Phoenix Group from an espionage organization to a division of the military (which it wasn't in the Tessa story). Again, a really simple explanation, but really should be explained in the DWO story.

: - Explanation for Micki Jones not being in the DWO story:  remember the ending of James Bond film "On Her Majesty's Secret Service"?  Perhaps Micki suffered the same fate at the hands of a DWO agent, which caused Shorty to join the Phoenix Group, since they were the only ones with the resources to help him get revenge on the DWO.  There's great potential for further plot and character development there.  :)

: - Explanation for Indy and Meg not acting like they're married in the DWO story:  perhaps they still are but didn't get sick of each other (rare in married couples these days, unfortunately), or perhaps they got divorced (how they remained friends, though, I have no idea), or whatever.

: 
: Remember, these are all points that very well could have happened in the five years between the two stories.  Some of them may have been assumed in the DWO story, but they really should be written in (perhaps in flashbacks... it's up to you) as to clear up a lot, and that ultimately would make everything flow smoothly from one story to the next.

: As for Chapter 64 in the Tessa story, who's to say that Tessa dreamed the entire Tessa story? Perhaps everything in the Tessa story actually happened, and Chapter 64 took place many years after both the Tessa story and the DWO story... and an elderly Tessa was remembering everything that happened as she was on a plane, and then started telling the guy sitting next to her about it. Very much like in the "Young Indiana Jones Chronicles" where old Indiana Jones remembered his youth and started telling it to the first person who'd listen. :D

: My point is that it's much better to leave the Tessa story alone and to think of creative ways to make the two (as they already are) flow together while writing the DWO story (using my suggestions would ensure that you wouldn't even have to rewrite any of what you've already written in your DWO story). Especially with the Lambert brothers thing... writing the explanation into the DWO story would add so much more possibilites for plot or sub-plot rather in future chapters rather than touching the Tessa story, and ultimately both stories would even richer for it!

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: -G

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